P5
Feedback Review
I agreed with most of the feedback I was given because I trust my reviewers' opinions and that they were reading my script from their point-of-view. I quickly reflected on the positive feedback because it showed me the parts of the script that they appreciated. The reviewers' agreed that my grammar, punctuation and formatting were done well and they gave a few suggestions to improve it. The first reviewer suggested minor changes to the punctuation and sentence length which I made. They also found that a section of dialogue on page 5 sounded unnatural so it went back over it. The second reviewer found that some of the action was unnecessary so I made a few changes that led me to find other parts I wanted to change such as the a basic explanation of the portals' physics. They agreed that some of the dialogue didn't flow and they said that I could add more character description.
I disagreed with the suggestion that the "Roll Credit Sequence" at the end was unusual because several films have sections before the title sequence. Even though I disagreed with this point, I decided to change the transition to a "Fade Out". I had some difficulty distinguishing from the second reviewer whether they were making a statement or a suggestion about my script. Similarly, in the first review, the reviewer used a question mark: "Strange place to put a title sequence?" which was inconvenient but I assumed that it was a comment with less conviction.
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I agreed with most of the feedback I was given because I trust my reviewers' opinions and that they were reading my script from their point-of-view. I quickly reflected on the positive feedback because it showed me the parts of the script that they appreciated. The reviewers' agreed that my grammar, punctuation and formatting were done well and they gave a few suggestions to improve it. The first reviewer suggested minor changes to the punctuation and sentence length which I made. They also found that a section of dialogue on page 5 sounded unnatural so it went back over it. The second reviewer found that some of the action was unnecessary so I made a few changes that led me to find other parts I wanted to change such as the a basic explanation of the portals' physics. They agreed that some of the dialogue didn't flow and they said that I could add more character description.
I disagreed with the suggestion that the "Roll Credit Sequence" at the end was unusual because several films have sections before the title sequence. Even though I disagreed with this point, I decided to change the transition to a "Fade Out". I had some difficulty distinguishing from the second reviewer whether they were making a statement or a suggestion about my script. Similarly, in the first review, the reviewer used a question mark: "Strange place to put a title sequence?" which was inconvenient but I assumed that it was a comment with less conviction.
Final Script
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